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簡單評論：作秀華式作文炒人氣用，附帶效果是降低台灣格調
人家在受苦，你寫這些，真的很丟台灣人臉，而且使人反感

來句句評一下：

: To Mr. Tedros Adhanom Ghebreyesus, Director-General of the World Health
: Organization,
: As you are reading this, with tens of millions of people around the world
: fighting the pandemic at the cost of their lives and freedom, it is regrettable
: that the WHO, under your leadership, has not stopped the flow of misinformation.
: You and other WHO officials, in January and February, made a succession of
: critical mistakes,
犯很多錯就犯很多錯，幹嘛強調"succession"連續錯誤...
贅詞不ok

: including your erroneous descriptions of China’s containing
: of the outbreak and your misdeclaration of COVID-19’s low possibility of
: human-to-human transmission.

這邊就事實陳述，你上一句都是情緒用語，突然轉折有點不順

而且前一句已經說"critical mistakes"了，
後面用"including"(包含)卻還要加"erroneous description"(有誤的)，
還用"misdeclaration"(誤報)
這句翻回中文不就是：
你犯了一堆關鍵錯誤，包括xxx等有誤的敘述與誤報xxx

順帶一提，用"description敘述"和"misdeclaration"這些名詞，又使得你這句子更冗贅了
真要說就改describing之類的

然後misdeclaration用這邊好像也怪怪的，因為比較常用是用在誤報關稅或貨品之類的
而這種"錯誤宣導"我是比較沒看過這樣用啦

: On April 9, you made public remarks with a
: scathing tone, attacking Taiwan, our country, a success story fighting
: coronavirus.

這句真是尷尬癌爆開

"scathing tone" 你以為是在寫劇本膩？這應該是放在台詞前面括弧裡的
是有必要這麼戲劇化？
而且這種寫法比較像是在講故事，一般對話這樣很怪

後面"Taiwan, our country"這邊也很怪

因為你既然是寫信，就要署名一下，但你沒署名，又要用"our"
感覺就不太對。個人認為"our country"很冗。

但我懂啦，你就是要強調Taiwan=country
到時候中央社標題就可以下"阿滴公開信說台灣是國家，被nyt刊頭版"

讀英文版只會覺得那個有點突兀...根本不會意識到你偷渡country

"success story"也是很尷尬
你如果是Michael Phelps寫信時會自稱自己拿很多面金牌是個success story嗎？
但這也不是重點，
重點是人家美國現在為疫情苦腦中，你跑過去說"看我們多棒！！！！"
很屁孩

: You claimed that in the past three months, Taiwan has been attacking you. But
: the truth is, Taiwan is a partner of your hometown, Ethiopia, where Taiwan
: provides medical missions, water resources, and continued support for women and
: children's rights and food security. Taiwanese have raised money for students
: from Ethiopia to receive medical treatment, and Taiwanese businesses have even
: sponsored tens of thousands of children in Ethiopia, hoping that Ethiopia and
: Taiwan can work together for a better future.
都要事實陳述了，何不把數據搬出來?
然後這一段只會讓我想到Mark Zuckerberg夫妻給他們小孩的信
尤其是work together for a better future 這個說法orz

真要寫那種大外宣的東西，就一定要有數據
像Zuckerberg在他給女兒的公開信就直接說，
"We will give 99% of our Facebook shares -- currently about $45 billion..."
而且還是預計要做啥
感覺比較有說服力

不然你這樣根本是為情緒勒索鋪路，
很像媽媽說"媽20年來都犧牲這麼多，拚命賺錢就為了讓你可以讀好大學..."
聽到這你覺得下一句會說啥？

所以當然是要像facebook一樣直接說
"媽打算把家產的70%、定存的1000萬都給你啦！所以要對我溫柔一點多陪我一點啦"
不然你那個版本的下一句一定是"...你怎麼可以對我這麼冷漠QQ"

: While we have been standing with your country, you chose to adopt an opposite
: attitude towards our country. You accused Taiwan of organizing a cyberattack
: that lasted three months, yet you ignored the warnings Taiwan sent to the WHO
: about the outbreak as early as in late December 2019.

我就說吧，果真勒索下去了！
"我一直這麼支持你的，你卻用這種態度對媽媽...!(下略)QQQ"
這種話誰要聽啦==

: Taiwan launched various forms of innovative preventive measures in January and
: now serves as a good reference for officials in countries including New Zealand
: and the United States. We believe we can provide the help the world needs, and
: even though the WHO has not even given Taiwan the right to participate in any
: way, we have taken the initiative to contribute to the world.

小學生式的自我感覺良好 不評論
下面也都是類似的 恕刪..

: Please take Taiwan seriously. Taiwan is a reliable helper and the Taiwanese
: people are helping every friend worldwide who values human rights and shares

"我天天幫你買超營養早餐還精選無糖健康豆漿，拜託請愛我！！"
"我這麼認真去認識你兄弟們，你都不願意看我一眼....please take me seriously!!!"

通篇都是這種感覺啦

就算前面買早餐的事真的是對方賺到，你後面那堆情緒用語，什麼"take Taiwan seriously"
如果是第三人稱就是軟性說教，

就算一堆台灣做的事是事實（就像你媽真的對你很好、工具人真的很會幫你）
你那種微妙的語調和修飾方法就會大改想傳達的意思
造成反效果

大家說不會有人認真看，我覺得不要看最好==

最後建議直接署名Ray Du English之類的
一方面澄清是你們自己要搞的
另一方面說不定華裔移民看了還覺得"喔！原來是英語補習班廣告呢！"
賺更多啦

幹，看到這種文章真的會無言....

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